Please estimate my writing

I wrote a writing this afternoon.
And I sent it to my teacher to evaluate it.
He gave me the score 5 out of 6(6 is the perfect score).
It's the first time I got 5.(I always got 4~4.5 before)
I used 46 minutes to finish the writing.
And the formal test time is 45 minutes.
The major reasons that I got score 5 are that number of words is enough(460 words) and that the number of errors of spelling and grammer is just a few.

But I am cusious how do you think about my writing.
Because the amount of my vocabulary is not great, I just use basic words to express my meaning.
I want to know what is the level of the writing in your perspectives.
If you have time, please help me score it.
Thanks a lot!!
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